At last! I've revised chapter 1 of Ghosts of Innocence. What a struggle that was!
And I don't think I've actually changed all that much in the end. The overall flow of the chapter is still the same, but I've changed the imagery of the opening paragraphs to get straight into Shayla's point of view from the outset, I've followed a lot of nit-picks from critiques to clean up the text, trimmed some fat, and given Shayla a tougher time making her exit from the crippled ship. This will give her some problems to deal with later on, which I still have to work out and incorporate into the story!
Overall, I'm a lot happier with the chapter. To me, it feels closer in to the main character, cleaner, and more logically-sequenced.
But that is only my opinion. It is now in the queue on Critique Circle ready to be mauled again next week.
Meanwhile, on with the next chapter...