Saturday, July 19, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors July 20

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog hop where participants post up to eight sentences of their writing. You can find out more about it by clicking on the image below.
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Shayla, codename "Shark", has met Cobra and noticed he was keeping a line of sight clear between her and the side of the forest clearing. She challenged the hidden observer to come out...

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The bushes hesitated, then rustled. A woman emerged, scowling. "You're late!" Her hand rested on a holstered pistol. Small, precision beam weapon. Deadly in the hands of an expert, but it took an expert to use it properly.

Shayla bowed low. "Shark, at your service."

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26 comments:

  1. Intriguing, Ian. Shark at your service reminds me of my wife during our divorce. Yikes.

    Nice one, eh. Enjoy the rest of your weekend, good sir.

    Gary

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  2. Well that seems to be a definite twist. Did Cobra think the woman in the woods was on his side?

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  3. Haha! The first comment made me chuckle.

    I like the code names you gave them, Ian. Well, you know, I like the entire book!

    Good 8. :-)

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  4. Gary, sorry to have brought back such memories. However, it's true that Shayla is not someone you want to run into in a dark alley - as she proves later on in the story ;)

    Chelle, Such brief snippets can be confusing. I think the subsequent sentences would make things clearer. Will likely post them next week.

    Teresa, Gary always has amusing things to say. So glad you enjoyed the book.

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  5. So is she thinking that woman is no expert with the weapon?

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  6. I'm definitely intrigued. I'm assuming the woman is an expert with her weapon of choice. :)

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  7. Yeah, I'm thinking she's an expert. I like how she comes out of the bushes all defensive like, and that Shayla is completely composed. Another great snippet.

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  8. Millie, I think she's weighing the evidence...

    Karen, that remains to be seen :)

    Alexis, I suspect you'd be a bit peeved if you thought you were safely hidden but you were spotted anyway.

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  9. And I'm betting she's quite deadly herself. I like her introduction.

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  10. She sounds like quite an operative.

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  11. Interesting...you've got me wondering if she's expert enough to use that weapon.

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  12. I liked the 'You're late!' comment and how she responds at the end. Shark is a nifty code name. Good 8!

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  13. Shayla doesn't seem to threatened by the weapon. I wonder if she can tell the other person isn't an expert?

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  14. I like how much you were able to establish the characters in so few words. Great snippet! :)

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  15. Elaine, Sue Ann, Cara - that remains to be seen :)

    Frank, nothing like coming straight to the point.

    Caitlin, she's extremely confident in her own abilities. Sometimes too much so...

    Victoria, thanks.

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  16. I like how the bushes hesitated. Some fun writing here. There is tension, but also humor. Nice.

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  17. Interesting snippet. I'm impressed with the detail that led Shayla to know there was someone lurking. Great 8!

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  18. Shell, glad you could see what I was trying for here. I remember critiquers picking this apart..."How can bushes hesitate?"...way too literal.

    Veronica, in Shayla's work, attention to detail can mean the difference between life and death.

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  19. Wow, Ian. Love the tension here. Poor Gary. I hope he was joking.

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  20. Thanks, Denise, I hope so too...

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  21. Great tension! You're keeping us all on tenterhooks;).

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  22. Great little snippet. It makes me want to know what happens next.

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  23. Ooh! Shark. That's an epic nickname.

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  24. Shark . . . I love the name of your characters!

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  25. Glad to hear it, Tina :)

    Lynda, thanks.

    Crystal, I kinda liked it, too. Wait till you meet the next member of the gang ;)

    Chrys, several critiquers commented on my character names. Not so much these code names, but some of the real names we meet later on.

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