But are we there yet?
Not quite. I still have a few rounds to go.
First, there's a couple of specific scene additions to write and weave in. Then I need to work through with a handful of more global comments in mind. Then I'll print it out and read in hard copy, red pen in hand.
The most troublesome bit, though, is what to do with the opening.
I still have the original opening chapter, with the adult Shayla sending a starship crashing into a planet.
But I also have a short chapter with the young Shayla being hustled out of her childhood home and made to watch her own planet get toasted.
Do I open with this instead, then fast-forward to the adult hell-bent on revenge? But I like the original opening and I think it's the more immediately gripping.
Would it work better as a prologue, given the time lapse? But everyone hates prologues.
Or do I work it in later as a flashback? But I hate flashbacks.