Saturday, July 23, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors July 24

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog hop where participants post eight to ten sentences of their writing. You can find out more about it by clicking on the image below.
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Continuing a scene from my current WIP, The Ashes of Home, Shayla has tracked a mysterious madman, Randall, to a makeshift bar in a forestry work camp. The patrons have been plying him with drink, and he rewards them with an insane rant about fire falling from the sky. Skipping ahead a few paragraphs from last week’s snippet, the ‘audience’ has been goading Randall on with questions about his visions. Shayla pitches in with a question of her own...

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“What color is the fire?” Shayla called.

She ignored the puzzled stares nearby.

Sightless eyes turned towards her, then lifted to the ceiling. Randall raised his arms, hands outstretched like a priest before the altar of Unity. His voice was hushed. “It is the purest, cleanest, palest lilac. Too bright. Too bright. No mortal eyes should look upon that light.”


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Hmmm...what will Shayla make of his answer? See her reaction next week.

24 comments:

Anonymous said...

Cool. She clearly knew exactly what question to ask, and I'm sure his one-word answer will provide useful information.

Hilary Melton-Butcher said...

Hi Ian - Randall knew the answer for the hottest part of fire ... interesting - cheers Hilary

Jessica E. Subject said...

Interesting! She obviously knows what to ask to get the answers she wants. I hope she is able to get them all from this man.

stephen Hayes said...

These excerpts are building my interest.

Unknown said...

That's a very specific answer. I have a feeling Shayla asked that question for a good reason.

Veronica Scott said...

Ooh, smart question. I like the way she thinks - great snippet.

Amy Braun said...

Something makes me think mortal eyes will look at that fire regardless. ;)

Botanist said...

You'll see her reaction next week, it makes perfect sense to her.

Botanist said...

And what does that tell us? :)

Botanist said...

She's following a hunch, but didn't expect to hear it confirmed.

Botanist said...

Steven, you might want to check out Ghosts of Innocence, which sets the stage for this story.

Botanist said...

She did indeed, and she'd already noticed how specific he was being in his descriptions.

Botanist said...

She's a smart cookie :)

Botanist said...

But it's rare to live to tell the tale afterwards :)

Unknown said...

That is an interesting fire color. I wonder if it has significance for her...

Unknown said...

I love the way he talks. You can't help but be pulled in by the dialogue. Wonderful job! :)

Botanist said...

Oh yes indeed! Very painful significance.

Botanist said...

Thanks Evelyn. He is fun to write :)

Teresa Cypher said...

"...altar of Unity" Nice bit of world-building there. Ian. :-)

I will be back next week to see if Shayla knows the significance of the lilac color. She does, of course..she was fishing with that question, right? ;-)

Botanist said...

You might remember Ghosts had these little religious themes running through it too. And, yes, she was fishing though not quite believing what she suspected...

Kim M said...

So, Ian, I suspect our local madman was quite sane before he saw the light ;-)

Elizabeth Alsobrooks said...

I would be quite nervous about now if I were her.

Botanist said...

I guess that's one way of putting it, Kim :)

Botanist said...

When she realizes what he means it's not so much nervous as shocked...

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