Saturday, July 23, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors July 24

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog hop where participants post eight to ten sentences of their writing. You can find out more about it by clicking on the image below.
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Continuing a scene from my current WIP, The Ashes of Home, Shayla has tracked a mysterious madman, Randall, to a makeshift bar in a forestry work camp. The patrons have been plying him with drink, and he rewards them with an insane rant about fire falling from the sky. Skipping ahead a few paragraphs from last week’s snippet, the ‘audience’ has been goading Randall on with questions about his visions. Shayla pitches in with a question of her own...

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“What color is the fire?” Shayla called.

She ignored the puzzled stares nearby.

Sightless eyes turned towards her, then lifted to the ceiling. Randall raised his arms, hands outstretched like a priest before the altar of Unity. His voice was hushed. “It is the purest, cleanest, palest lilac. Too bright. Too bright. No mortal eyes should look upon that light.”


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Hmmm...what will Shayla make of his answer? See her reaction next week.

24 comments:

  1. Cool. She clearly knew exactly what question to ask, and I'm sure his one-word answer will provide useful information.

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    1. You'll see her reaction next week, it makes perfect sense to her.

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  2. Hi Ian - Randall knew the answer for the hottest part of fire ... interesting - cheers Hilary

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  3. Interesting! She obviously knows what to ask to get the answers she wants. I hope she is able to get them all from this man.

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    1. She's following a hunch, but didn't expect to hear it confirmed.

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  4. These excerpts are building my interest.

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    1. Steven, you might want to check out Ghosts of Innocence, which sets the stage for this story.

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  5. That's a very specific answer. I have a feeling Shayla asked that question for a good reason.

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    1. She did indeed, and she'd already noticed how specific he was being in his descriptions.

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  6. Ooh, smart question. I like the way she thinks - great snippet.

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  7. Something makes me think mortal eyes will look at that fire regardless. ;)

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    1. But it's rare to live to tell the tale afterwards :)

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  8. That is an interesting fire color. I wonder if it has significance for her...

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    1. Oh yes indeed! Very painful significance.

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  9. I love the way he talks. You can't help but be pulled in by the dialogue. Wonderful job! :)

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    1. Thanks Evelyn. He is fun to write :)

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  10. "...altar of Unity" Nice bit of world-building there. Ian. :-)

    I will be back next week to see if Shayla knows the significance of the lilac color. She does, of course..she was fishing with that question, right? ;-)

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    1. You might remember Ghosts had these little religious themes running through it too. And, yes, she was fishing though not quite believing what she suspected...

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  11. So, Ian, I suspect our local madman was quite sane before he saw the light ;-)

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    1. I guess that's one way of putting it, Kim :)

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  12. I would be quite nervous about now if I were her.

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    1. When she realizes what he means it's not so much nervous as shocked...

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