Saturday, September 6, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors September 7

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I have skipped ahead a bit from the last snippet. Shayla, codename "Shark", has rendezvoused in the tropical forest with members of a terrorist cell. They are traveling by boat, navigating a maze of waterways and finally emerging onto a wider stretch of open water.

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The far side looked to be about a mile away. The water seemed unmoving, oily surface disturbed only by myriad dancing insects.

Weasel kept the boat close to the near shore and headed north. Tiger and Cobra scanned the sky constantly. After half an hour, Cobra held up his hand and Weasel cut the motor.

Cobra pointed to a smudge of deeper shadow amongst the trees on the far shore. Weasel nodded and angled the boat out into open water. Afternoon heat closed in like a vice, amplified by the heavy air and sunlight reflecting off the water.

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Master assassin Shayla Carver has killed many times. That's what assassins do, nothing to lose sleep over, but this mission is different.

She's never killed a whole planet before.

16 comments:

Daezarkian13 said...

Smoothly written, tense, terrific details. Well done!

Teresa Cypher said...

A sensory treat. The details are perfect in this snippet, Ian. :-)

Liz Blocker said...

I love this: "Afternoon heat closed in like a vice". It's bee n so hot and humid where I live, and this is such a perfect description of that feeling.

Charmaine Gordon said...

I'm enveloped by your description. Wonderful.

Veronica Scott said...

I'm enjoying the story and was thoroughly drawn in by the details of the water, the insects, all of it. Can't wait to see what happens next. Great snippet!

Catch My Words said...

The description of the water is beautifully disgusting. Love it! Nice snippet.

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Botanist said...

Steven, glad you can sense the tension amongst the details here.

Teresa, Liz, Charmaine, a bit of description this week to balance the previous action :)

Veronica, we'll be following this thread for a little while longer...

Joyce, "beautifully disgusting" - nailed it :D

Anonymous said...

Sounds like the water must be really hot.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Love the visual. This line especially. 'Afternoon heat closed in like a vice, amplified by the heavy air and sunlight reflecting off the water.' Definitely stifling!

Anonymous said...

Very vivid and tactile. Oppressive heat makes the tension even more unbearable. Really great scene setting.

Anonymous said...

Fabulous description! I could the oily water and what the shores looked like. Great job.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Now that's nice description. Well done.

Botanist said...

Sue Ann, maybe, but I don't think I'd be tempted to take a dip :)

Karen, Alexis, I was going for stifling and oppressive.

Tina, Elaine, thanks!

Unknown said...

I can feel the tension building...ah, and now I'm hot and sweaty too! Nice job!

Anonymous said...

This feels very heavy with expectation. Really great imagery!

Botanist said...

Ooh-er Millie :)

Christina, expectation is good, keep the reader guessing :)

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