tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post5243002641526354814..comments2024-03-16T07:55:54.153-07:00Comments on Views From the Bald Patch: Weekend Writing Warriors September 7Botanisthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-71532698637526808502014-09-08T19:33:44.393-07:002014-09-08T19:33:44.393-07:00Ooh-er Millie :)
Christina, expectation is good, ...Ooh-er Millie :)<br /><br />Christina, expectation is good, keep the reader guessing :)Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-3432154324061033782014-09-07T20:12:24.822-07:002014-09-07T20:12:24.822-07:00This feels very heavy with expectation. Really gre...This feels very heavy with expectation. Really great imagery!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-65608139659984540652014-09-07T18:32:08.947-07:002014-09-07T18:32:08.947-07:00I can feel the tension building...ah, and now I...I can feel the tension building...ah, and now I'm hot and sweaty too! Nice job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-70531267585000705102014-09-07T18:09:48.292-07:002014-09-07T18:09:48.292-07:00Sue Ann, maybe, but I don't think I'd be t...Sue Ann, maybe, but I don't think I'd be tempted to take a dip :)<br /><br />Karen, Alexis, I was going for stifling and oppressive.<br /><br />Tina, Elaine, thanks!Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-25901227792170474932014-09-07T16:36:14.701-07:002014-09-07T16:36:14.701-07:00Now that's nice description. Well done.Now that's nice description. Well done.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-64577793311484584372014-09-07T16:33:47.233-07:002014-09-07T16:33:47.233-07:00Fabulous description! I could the oily water and w...Fabulous description! I could the oily water and what the shores looked like. Great job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-67323368340933892902014-09-07T14:15:02.572-07:002014-09-07T14:15:02.572-07:00Very vivid and tactile. Oppressive heat makes the...Very vivid and tactile. Oppressive heat makes the tension even more unbearable. Really great scene setting.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-11389899227933644662014-09-07T14:08:28.544-07:002014-09-07T14:08:28.544-07:00Love the visual. This line especially. 'Aftern...Love the visual. This line especially. 'Afternoon heat closed in like a vice, amplified by the heavy air and sunlight reflecting off the water.' Definitely stifling! Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-27500519203026153952014-09-07T10:50:56.456-07:002014-09-07T10:50:56.456-07:00Sounds like the water must be really hot.Sounds like the water must be really hot.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-7498544027521930002014-09-07T10:34:24.769-07:002014-09-07T10:34:24.769-07:00Steven, glad you can sense the tension amongst the...Steven, glad you can sense the tension amongst the details here.<br /><br />Teresa, Liz, Charmaine, a bit of description this week to balance the previous action :)<br /><br />Veronica, we'll be following this thread for a little while longer...<br /><br />Joyce, "beautifully disgusting" - nailed it :DBotanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-33748491113067541442014-09-07T09:56:57.827-07:002014-09-07T09:56:57.827-07:00The description of the water is beautifully disgus...The description of the water is beautifully disgusting. Love it! Nice snippet.<br /><br />http://joycelansky.blogspot.comCatch My Wordshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06338761214938263819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-80571375691415555902014-09-07T09:41:33.578-07:002014-09-07T09:41:33.578-07:00I'm enjoying the story and was thoroughly draw...I'm enjoying the story and was thoroughly drawn in by the details of the water, the insects, all of it. Can't wait to see what happens next. Great snippet!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-79255993974126507552014-09-07T08:46:33.453-07:002014-09-07T08:46:33.453-07:00I'm enveloped by your description. Wonderful.I'm enveloped by your description. Wonderful.Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-23001191533908429652014-09-07T06:49:39.221-07:002014-09-07T06:49:39.221-07:00I love this: "Afternoon heat closed in like a...I love this: "Afternoon heat closed in like a vice". It's bee n so hot and humid where I live, and this is such a perfect description of that feeling.Liz Blockerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16160510626027597666noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-50579513199067381492014-09-07T06:02:33.011-07:002014-09-07T06:02:33.011-07:00A sensory treat. The details are perfect in this s...A sensory treat. The details are perfect in this snippet, Ian. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-54945025075084121452014-09-07T04:28:03.081-07:002014-09-07T04:28:03.081-07:00Smoothly written, tense, terrific details. Well d...Smoothly written, tense, terrific details. Well done!Daezarkian13https://www.blogger.com/profile/08839083029518977312noreply@blogger.com