Saturday, September 27, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors September 28

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog hop where participants post up to eight sentences of their writing. You can find out more about it by clicking on the image below.
http://www.wewriwa.com/

Shayla, codename "Shark", has rendezvoused in the tropical forest with members of a terrorist cell. They are traveling by boat, navigating a maze of waterways and finally emerging onto a wider stretch of open water. They are crossing painfully slowly, when they become aware of an Imperial air cruiser approaching...

I've kept this one short to avoid having to mess with punctuation.

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For the first time, Shayla felt keenly the dangers of capture. She knew she would likely die before giving information away under interrogation, not from choice but from deeply implanted conditioning. And in Imperial custody, the road to death could be long indeed.

I will not be taken. Her fingers closed around the grip of a needle gun under her cloak. She glanced at Tiger, and saw the thin set of her lips and a small movement as she also loosed her pistol in its holster.

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27 comments:

  1. I hope she's able to resist the interrogation. That could be tough.

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  2. Great tension, Ian. :-) Such a good scene from a good book! :-)

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  3. So dangerous, great tension building. I'm impatient to read next week, right now things look so dire. Great 8.

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  4. Intense! You're really rocketing up the tension here, well done!

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  5. Grim situation gets even more grim! And the audience is on the edge of its collective chairs...can't wait for more. I hope they don't have to fight it out.

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  6. Perfect. The mounting tension, needle guns at the ready and so am I, the reader.

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  7. "the road to death could be long indeed."
    Good line!

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  8. Excellent. Short works here, ratcheting up the tension. Can't wait for next week.

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  9. Joyce, of course she's planning on not having to :)

    Teresa, thanks

    Chelle, Steven, this segment is all about the tension :)

    Veronica, there will be fighting, but not yet...

    Charmaine, guns ready, but stealth is the key here.

    Frank, I liked that line too :)

    Alexis, I had to cut it short, the next sentences lead into new territory.

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  10. Great tension. I love how she prepares herself and Tiger as well. Well done.

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  11. Cara, thanks.

    Elaine, knowing Shayla, I have to ask when is she not in trouble? :)

    Tina, those little details are important to establish the nature of these characters.

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  12. Enjoyed the tense-filled scene! Great descriptions on how they readied themselves to face the threat.

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  13. That left me holding my breath. I wonder which one of them will make the first move. Tense snippet!

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  14. Keep it together girl...you're gonna get through this. Ian isn't that evil of an author, is he? To allow you to be captured? I'm gonna have faith...and wait with baited breath till next week!

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  15. Karen, readiness is a life-or-death matter here.

    Frank, or maybe neither? :)

    Millie, I just have one thing to say...Mwahahahaha...

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  16. Dun dun DUN! I can see why she'd be stressed, but if she freaks out too early, she might cause the problem she was trying to avoid. Nothing says suspicious like people pointing weapons at you.

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  17. I get the impression that if she's going to point a weapon it'll be at herself.

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  18. I may be the weird one here, but I'm hoping they do fight because I know it'll be one riveting scene! This is such a great excerpt, Ian. All tidy and succinct, yet about to burst at the seams. How do you do that? :-)

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  19. Loving the tension here, and the strong character.

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  20. Sue Ann, that remains an option, though she'll likely take a few others down with her first.

    Marcia, at this stage it's all about the tension :)

    Lynda, thanks, I like Shayla, she was fun to write.

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  21. A lot of menace here. She knows her path...

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  22. Wow, you certainly get a lot of tension squeezed into a few sentences here. Great writing!

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  23. I just smile as I read these. You know I enjoyed your book, and I still find myself thinking about it periodically.

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  24. Denise, she does indeed!

    Shell, thanks.

    Crystal, thanks - I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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