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Continuing a chapter from Ghosts of Innocence, Shayla has stolen the identity of a new high-ranking Imperial appointee, Brynwyn bin Covin. She’s been met by a soldier (Kurt) from the Imperial Palace Guard, who’s escorting her to the Palace. They have just stepped outside while Shayla’s baggage is loaded into the car. Kurt spotted a row of punishment stalls across the square, and was busily dropping a coin into each slot until he ran out of coins. Shayla threw him a handful of small change.
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He looked surprised, then delighted. "Eternal thanks, Magister Summis," he spluttered.
"Tribute to the Emperor, vengeance to the Almighty," Shayla intoned, showing that she felt it to be nothing more than her duty to help him.
By now, the onlookers had closed in behind Shayla. Talk stilled, as if in anticipation of sport beyond run-of-the-mill torture. She felt eyes burning into the back of her head as she approached the line of prisoners. She felt alone. Exposed. It was not like an assassin to be the center of attention like this.
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14 comments:
If she doesn't like being the center of attention, you've got me wondering why she put herself in that position.
Exceptional to this reader and well done.
She's playing the role well, though I'm sure it must be very hard for her at this moment.
Hoping for that Hail Mary pass to save her from this situation! Excellent tension, Ian.
She becomes the center of attention fairly often, as I recall other snippets from this story in the past, but she handles it with aplomb every time. So I can't wait to see how this instance turns out. Great excerpt!
Ed, unfortunately she has a role to play, so she doesn't have much choice here.
Charmaine, thanks.
Jessica, it's about to get a whole lot harder ...
Nancy, no saves, except her own wits.
Veronica, that is very true.
That last line--so very true! Good snippet, Ian! :-)
You keep reminding the reader who she really is--an assassin, and she's on a mission. Good job.
Good excerpt. I could feel her tension beautifully.
Teresa, trouble is, assassins can't always lurk in the shadows.
Diane, and it's a very serious mission, too.
Elaine, thanks.
She is truly out of her comfort zone. :)
I can definitely feel her discomfort here. Very suspenseful!
Karen, Christina, uncomfortable for sure, but necessary. And she is very dedicated to getting the job done.
Hi Ian - I'm catching up ... and so look forward to how Shayla copes with this situation ... she seems to be aware of what's likely to happen ... cheers Hilary
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