Saturday, May 7, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors May 8

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog hop where participants post eight to ten sentences of their writing. You can find out more about it by clicking on the image below.
http://www.wewriwa.com/

Continuing a draft scene from my latest WIP, Shayla Carver is in disguise and stopped off at a work canteen to refuel. She inadvertently took some of the good food, supposedly off-limits to “her kind”, and is going to see what response her actions will provoke.

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She finished loading her tray and sauntered toward the front, angling towards an empty table near a window.

A lanky youngster in a guard’s uniform intercepted her. It wasn’t clear whether he was on duty or simply passing through, but he glanced over his shoulder then jerked his head towards the back of the room. “You should find somewhere with your own people.”

“Back off, soldier.” Shayla kept her tone low but firm. She held his gaze, expressions set like stone. “And be ready to fetch the clean-up crew.”

He swallowed and nodded. Shayla breathed a sigh of relief that he wasn’t too green to catch on to the Firenzi military slang.

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19 comments:

Hilary Melton-Butcher said...

Hi Ian - not knowing the whole - this seems an interesting snippet ... and gives us an idea of the dangers lurking behind that special food ...

Good luck - cheers Hilary

Unknown said...

I'm guessing clean-up doesn't mean doing the dishes in this case? Can't wait to see what happens next!

Cara Bristol said...

She's bold...or foolish.

Marcia said...

Wow, she doesn't take crap from anybody, this is great! The tension is crackling throughout this scene.

Botanist said...

Hilary, crossing the local unwritten conventions can be dangerous.

Christina, that would be a correct guess :)

Cara, she's hopping mad. That's a whole new dimension of dangerous!

Marcia, you got it, and glad the tension is evident.

Veronica Scott said...

She's tough all right. Since this kid didn't challenge her too much, I wonder what will set off the inevitable confrontation! Enjoying the story...

Anonymous said...

I gather he'll be part of the clean-up crew once the fight starts, correct?

Botanist said...

Veronica, this kid was just trying to head her off before trouble started. He has no idea who he's talking to :)

Ed, you got the right idea ... the "clean up crew" here refers to the medics. Someone's gonna need them.

Elizabeth Alsobrooks said...

She's one tough cookie. I like that about her, but I think this is going to get a lot worse before it gets better.

stephen Hayes said...

Another compelling installment.

Unknown said...

Huh, now I wonder what she was really asking. I suspect some kind of back-up or medical attention, but I could be wrong...

Botanist said...

Elizabeth, I like that about Shayla too :)

Stephen, glad you think so.

Caitlin, you got it right, and it will be needed...

Unknown said...

Hi ian this is andrea from n.ireland we met when we were all in dingle bay quite some years ago ive been meaning to contact you and maybe find either you or ali on facebook but had no success. I sent ali an email but not sure if its right or if she still uses it, i got it from your letter back in 2008 that you sent us.

Unknown said...

My email address is andreasharonschulz@gmail.com

Botanist said...

Hi Andrea, great to hear from you. I'll send you our correct email addresses shortly.

Jean Davis said...

He clearly has no idea who he's talking too. :) Great tension-filled tidbit.

Crystal Collier said...

Awesome conflict. I love the challenge and his reaction.

Botanist said...

Jean, you're right, he doesn't.

Crystal, he'd be daft to react any other way in the face of an angry Shayla :)

Teresa Cypher said...

Haha! This left me smiling. Those others clearly have no idea about Shayla's background. Great tension, Ian! Now off to read this week's!

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