Saturday, April 30, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors May 1

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Continuing a scene from my current WIP, The Ashes of Home. On a mission under cover, Shayla has stopped to eat at a remote forestry work canteen and appears to have overstepped an unwritten rule. The best food and prime seating is reserved for local Firenzi workers.

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“Oh,” Shayla whispered, “so I guess I’m not supposed to take these either.” She helped herself to two plump barbecued chicken breasts and a generous spoonful of locally-grown green beans.

The girl’s eyes widened in fright.

“What happens next, I wonder?”

“The best you can hope is they just take your rations.” The girl nodded towards the front of the room.

“Rations?” Shayla murmured. “There is no rationing on the work crews.”

“Tell that to the Quartermaster,” her companion muttered.

“I think I will.”


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20 comments:

  1. Yikes, Shayla is definitely up for causing trouble. Great snippet!

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  2. Haha! Tell him she will, and it might not be with words... Great string of snippets, Ian!

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  3. Stephen, I do try to keep things ticking along at a good pace :)

    Jessica, she's not shy. One piece of context that I should probably have mentioned along the way is that she is the governor of this planet (though no-one here will see through her disguise) so she has a personal stake in how well things are running.

    Teresa, you guessed it :) Glad you're enjoying this scene.

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  4. I love Shayla's attitude, Ian. And reading your comment above, I expect there will be fireworks ahead.

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  5. I wonder if she is really going to get in trouble or if she is going to make so much trouble for them that they will change the rule.

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  6. Kim, fireworks indeed.

    Linda, well, the rules are hers to make and change, but trouble seems to find Shayla wherever she goes :)

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  7. I predict that a fight, or at least a quarrel, may be about to break out. How's that for a safe prediction?

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  8. Oh-oh. I don't see this ending well.

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  9. She's doing a good job of provoking whoever us watching and trying to be in control. Love it! Great snippet.

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  10. Ed, I think your money's safe with that bet :)

    Elizabeth, hmmm...define "well"

    Veronica, Shayla? Provoke? Nawww....

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  11. TWO chicken breasts? Uh-oh, now it's on!

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  12. Food fight!!! Lol. You've got me hooked. I want to see where this goes.

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  13. It does seem silly to underfeed people who are working for you, and yet so many try. I'm not sure trying with her will get them more than injured!

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  14. I sense a confrontation! Great snippet.

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  15. Christina, why do things by halves?

    Cara, the fight is on!

    Caitlin, she actually the (undercover) boss, and shocked at what she's seeing.

    Sheila, you got it!

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  16. Sounds like she's in trouble. Hope this bold move doesn't hurt her too bad and that she doesn't have too much of a problem discussing rationing with them. Great snippet!

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  17. Ooh I like her so much. Can't wait for her little chat with the quartermaster. :)

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  18. Neva, somehow I don't think she's in trouble.

    Heather, "little chat" in Shayla's thinking is usually the non-verbal variety :)

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  19. LOL! Oh boy, I can see something bad in the works! I'm rooting for Shayla, she's my kind of character :-)

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