Saturday, April 16, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors April 17

Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog hop where participants post eight to ten sentences of their writing. You can find out more about it by clicking on the image below.
http://www.wewriwa.com/

Last week a hungry Shayla, disguised as a forestry worker from off-planet, entered a work canteen and felt her spidey senses tingle.

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Joining the line at one end of the servery, Shayla flashed her work badge to a sleepy cashier and took a mess tray. She glanced along the rows of hot trays, and spooned a portion of sweet fries.

Her scalp crawled once more at the sudden silence nearby. The cashier had miraculously wakened. “Umm, you can’t ...” He stammered to a stop when Shayla treated him to her best ice warrior glare.

“Hey,” someone hissed behind her. “I guess you’re new here.” The speaker used a dialect common on the Wala home world.

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18 comments:

  1. The suspense in this story keeps building.

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  2. Something tells me Shayla's been spotted - let's hope she's not in too much trouble!

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  3. Sounds like she's going to learn the rules really quick. Great snippet!

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  4. Stephen, LOL - that's good to hear :)

    Peter, spotted? We'll see. She's clearly done something wrong though.

    Jessica, if you think she's going to learn any rules you don't know Shayla very well yet :)

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  5. Sounds like things are going to get a little tense. lol

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  6. Uh-oh, sounds like she's not observing proper canteen etiquette, though I have a feeling she doesn't care. :-)

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  7. Karen, you reckon? :)

    Christina, she'll make that clear quite soon...

    Steven, things are hotting up in the kitchen.

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  8. My first impulse was to be worried about Shayla then I realized she's pretty capable. Still, could be a lot of people there who maybe would like to teach her a lesson. Yeah, still a little worried!

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  9. Ew, a rule breaker. I like her already! Great snippet!

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  10. Marcia, Shayla can look after herself, that's for sure.

    Elizabeth, utter disdain for the rules. What's not to like? :)

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  11. Huh, I wonder what the heck she did. Is she not allowed fires? Do people not serve themselves?
    Great job raising questions. :)

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  12. "spidey sense" way cool. This is a great blog hop to join.

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  13. Caitlin, Shayla is seeing the gap between what should be happening in the camp, and actual reality.

    Donna, it's a very cool weekly hop :)

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  14. If Shayla gave me her ice warrior stare, I'd stammer to a stop, too.

    I am intrigued, how she got to here from the end of the first book. :-)

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  15. Something's wrong, but what? Guess I'll have to read on to find out.

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  16. 'Ice warrior glare' Love that. :)

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  17. Teresa, wouldn't you like to know? :D

    Ed, that's the idea :)

    Heather, I kinda liked it too.

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