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Continuing with a scene from Wrath
of Empire, a prequel to my first
novel, Ghosts of Innocence.
Commander Gregor Pavlenko is overseeing maintenance on a giant plasma
cannon on board battleship Wrath of Empire.
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Gregor settled into his seat and nodded thanks as an orderly
placed a cup of unsweetened tea on the desk to one side. He sipped
the bitter brew and cleared his mind, then turned his attention to
the spread of consoles that surrounded his command post.
One by one,
stations reported in. Maintenance crews cleaned pipes and nozzles,
reattached wires the width of human hairs and jumper cables thicker
than his forearm, replaced worn parts, closed hatches and tightened
fastenings.
The plasma
cannon was ancient technology, and so simple in concept—rip apart
atoms of feedstock to create a star-hot plasma, and belch it out in
magnetically-confined parcels of destruction—yet so complex to
execute. It had been mastered by the navies of the six Families and
used by many Freeworlds and brigand outworlds.
Even after all these millennia it remained the most powerful
weapon in regular use. Technically, it ranked second place to the
quark bomb, but nobody counted that. Attempts to assemble quark bombs
had a ninety percent failure rate, along with lost lives and
irradiated continents. They were not practical weapons of war.
That’s nine sentences. The scene continues ...
The plasma
cannon was meek in comparison, but controlling a high grade plasma
and directing it in a tight beam was still tricky. It still needed a
small industrial city’s worth of power generation, containment
systems, cooling systems, and all the attendant controls and sensors.
As a
technology, it was commonplace, but only the Skamensis navy had
successfully scaled it up to this level.
“You’ve
been to see Violet again, haven’t
you?” Lieutenant Una Spelze, Gregor’s most senior weapons
specialist, plonked herself down at the next station.
He gave a non-committal grunt.
“You always get that faraway look in your eyes.” She grinned.
“It’s kinda cute, you know.”
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Just a reminder, I am looking for one
or two people to act as alpha readers. This would be for a full read
through the rough draft to give feedback on the big picture. Does the
plot hang together, how do the characters come across, does the story
flow and reach a satisfying conclusion ... that kind of thing.
I’m happy to reciprocate if you’ve
got work that you’d like an independent read through.
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