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Continuing the opening from The Long Dark, Jennifer receives an unwelcome message.
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Wordlessly, Jennifer plucked the envelope from Galloway’s limp grasp and turned it over in her fingers. The President’s personal seal was intact, and the real deal, as she verified with a tap to her tablet. A physical missive in a pry-proof envelope, primed to destruct if anyone but her broke the seal. Guaranteed confidentiality. A shiver ran up her spine.
The seat’s cream calfskin upholstery cradled her sudden weight as the craft lit its engines and began banking and maneuvering down through thickening air. As they banked, the skyward windows darkened against the sullen glare of the red giant star in the sky.
Tuned to her biometrics, the tablet confirmed her identity and disarmed the envelope’s destruct. A hard and razor sharp thumbnail cracked the seal and slit the flap of the envelope. She read the contents, bringing all her negotiation-table training to the task of keeping her dismay from showing.
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And continued progress with the cover art, although to be honest, not much headway this week. It’s been an intense week at work and most days I’ve been too tired to pick up a paintbrush.
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Interesting, my friend. Your snippet has me wondering whats next.
"...hard and razor sharp..." Nice choice of words. I think the reader will catch that her thumbnail isn't the only thing hard and razor sharp.
The huge and cumbersome trains they move in (on your painting) are much as I pictured them to be). The Conestoga trains of a strange and distant world.
Great details, really builds the reader's anticipation for finding out what's goin on here. Enjoyed the snippet!
Charmaine, we'll have to wait and see ;)
Teresa, that was the idea in the choice of words. And glad the picture is bearing out your mental image.
Veronica, glad you think so.
As a writer, I enjoyed how you drew out her opening the envelope. As a reader, I wanted you to hurry up. LOL Good job with the tension.
Cool! I like the artwork!
This is a nicely suspenseful snippet. I did wonder about her razor-sharp thumbnail. Do you explain later how she keeps from slicing herself open when she scratches?
About your cover, which I like. I didn't realize it was a painting. Now I'm even more impressed with it!
Diane, writer and reader reactions are exactly what I want to hear :)
Rick, thank you.
Ed, It is a painting in progress, still some way to go. All my book covers in the sidebar are my own paintings.
Now we want to know what's in the letter. Good tension building.
Hi Ian - I now want to see what's coming ... her hard and razor sharp thumbnail could prove an interesting weapon ... in due course.
Good luck with the work load and being able in due course to get in the mojo for more painting. You're one talented man ... take care - Hilary
Great build up here! I love the tech you use, I can't wait to find out what happens next.
I want to know what was in the envelope. Great tension building.
Elaine, Brittany, Karen, we'll find out more about the letter in coming snippets.
Hilary, I'm sure her nails could be a formidable weapon, but as it happens she's strictly into corporate violence, not physical.
What a wonderfully intense scene, Ian. The reader is right there with breath held!
Great snippet. Loved the tension.
And I love the cover art!
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