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Continuing the opening from The Long Dark, we are still with Jennifer’s point of view.
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Jennifer glanced at the three other members of the Company’s senior negotiating team before finally eyeing Simon Galloway coldly. He was no part of her team, and yet he’d invited himself onto her private shuttle, claiming to carry a message of vital importance from the President.
His green velvet jacket screamed extravagance. That, she could forgive, but worn over the top of a cream brocade waistcoat, silk cravat, with silk ruffs at the wrists it was ... over the top. Foppish.
Ice blue eyes regarded her patiently, destroying any illusion of whimsy.
“Well?” Better have this out in the open before her own simmering resentment got the better of her.
“I apologize for the unplanned intrusion.” His voice held no trace of contrition.
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And (making use of the new rules) this scene continues ...
“My orders were to bring this to the senior team only once we were off the longship.” He offered a slim white envelope, pinched delicately between thumb and forefinger, pinkie cocked like he was about to sup from a bone china teacup.
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And continued progress with the cover art
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15 comments:
Hi Ian ... you are leading us on ... the 'orders' I wonder what they entail. Your art - the landscape is full of detail .. while those wheels are interesting ... take care and all the best - Hilary
I don't think the tension is going to decrease any.
Charmaine Gordon June 20, 2020 At 5:50 pm. Good snippets, my friend.Excellent.
Looks can be deceiving. Glad she's not fooled. Great scene, Ian. Can't wait to read more . . . and more!
And LOVE the start for your cover. It's striking!
Why am I not convinced he's actually the fop she's trying to categorize him as? Loved the excerpt and really can't wait to read more...
Cover art is very cool. Like the use of the word foppish.
Hilary, the wheels were the trickiest part to paint so far.
Jessica, not a chance! :)
Charmaine, thanks.
Nancy, I'm pleased with how the artwork is progressing.
Veronica, he is definitely not one to be trifled with.
Alex, it's a lovely word, isn't it? :)
The tension is going to increase, isn't it? I'm curious to know more. Love the description of his eyes.
Oh, Ian, I like him. I expect the foppish attire and mannerisms are an act. Love to see how this plays out.
I loved your description of him -- especially the pinkie finger at the very end. That perfectly characterizes the facade he's presenting, though my readerly instincts suspect he just wants to be underestmated.
I too loved your description of him.
Never trust a social climbing fop! Your descriptions are amazing. Also wow to the design on those wheels! how long did it take you to do that part?
Karen, tension not letting up any time soon :)
Diane, Ed, his appearance is not exactly an act, but certainly something he cultivates.
Elaine, thanks.
Brittany, the wheels didn't take too long, but a lot of careful thought. Plus painting all the background behind first so it would show through.
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