Saturday, May 14, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors May 15

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Continuing a draft scene from my latest WIP, The Ashes of Home, Shayla Carver is in disguise and stopped off at a work canteen to refuel. She inadvertently took some of the good food, supposedly off-limits to “her kind”, and is going to see what response her actions will provoke. A guard, trying to avoid trouble, has just tried to head her off but Shayla told him to be ready to fetch the clean-up crew.

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She pushed past and found her way barred by a wall of muscle. The two thugs she’d originally marked stood a respectable distance behind, clearly nothing more than lieutenants in this bully ring.

The wall of muscle was topped by a face wearing an amiable grin. “Your folks sit back there.” He glanced down at Shayla’s tray. “And I see you’ve brought me my rations.” The grin widened.

Shayla gazed back at him, unfazed, expressionless.

“Stupid Woolly,” one of his henchmen muttered. “Dumb bitch can’t even understand you.”

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20 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

Oh...this is going to be good! Heehee...

Jessica E. Subject said...

I agree! Will definitely be exciting when Shayla does react. Great build up! :)

Anonymous said...

I'm pretty sure an explosion of ferocious activity is about to erupt, because this woman is NOT the waitress type.

Botanist said...

Teresa, good, but for whom? :)

Jessica, wait for it...

Ed, you have a knack for guessing right.

Kim M said...

I can't wait for her to kick ass! She is so cool, it is going to be monumental!

Hilary Melton-Butcher said...

Hi Ian - certainly Shayla can remain expressionless .. something we could all master - I await your next instalment .. cheers Hilary

Unknown said...

Oh man, they are just digging in deeper with every word. Can't wait for her reaction!

Botanist said...

Kim, ass-kicking on its way next week :)

Hilary, Shayla is a master of disguise and that naturally includes presenting to the world exactly what she wants to show.

Christina, they have dug a deep hole for themselves, that's for sure.

Veronica Scott said...

Oh dear, this is going to get very bad for the bullies, I have a feeling! But wonderful buildup going on, loved the excerpt.

Sheila said...

I hope getting called names makes her angry.

Cara Bristol said...

Oh nice. You had me at "wall of muscle." How far along are you in this story?

Botanist said...

Veronica, glad it's working for you.

Sheila, I suspect she's way past angry by now.

Cara, LOL, I might have guessed :) I've now got it about half drafted.

Marcia said...

ooo,yeah, that last comment is not going to go over well...you've mastered maintaining tension. Every week I look forward to finding out what Shayla's doing!

Elizabeth Alsobrooks said...

This is going to turn ugly quite suddenly I'm thinking.

Linda said...

They are asking for trouble.

Botanist said...

Marcia, Shayla's all about tension. Glad to hear that's coming over.

Elizabeth, you're quite right :)

Linda, now what would make you say that?

Unknown said...

It's weird that he'd even try to dress up those threats with a smile. I guess they're willing to let her go without too much violence if she caves.

Jean Davis said...

I sense a bad thing is about to happen to this guy.

Crystal Collier said...

Little does he know... Sounds like that guy might be in for a beat down.

Botanist said...

Caitlin, I think that's the pattern with bullying out in the open, there's (so far) nothing attributable in his behavior.

Jean, yep!

Crystal, I think you've met Shayla before haven't you :)

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