Continuing a draft scene from my latest WIP, The Ashes of Home, Shayla Carver is in disguise and stopped off at a work canteen to refuel. She inadvertently took some of the good food, supposedly off-limits to “her kind”, and is going to see what response her actions will provoke. A guard, trying to avoid trouble, has just tried to head her off but Shayla told him to be ready to fetch the clean-up crew.
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She pushed past and found her way barred by a wall of muscle. The two thugs she’d originally marked stood a respectable distance behind, clearly nothing more than lieutenants in this bully ring.
The wall of muscle was topped by a face wearing an amiable grin. “Your folks sit back there.” He glanced down at Shayla’s tray. “And I see you’ve brought me my rations.” The grin widened.
Shayla gazed back at him, unfazed, expressionless.
“Stupid Woolly,” one of his henchmen muttered. “Dumb bitch can’t even understand you.”
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Oh...this is going to be good! Heehee...
I agree! Will definitely be exciting when Shayla does react. Great build up! :)
I'm pretty sure an explosion of ferocious activity is about to erupt, because this woman is NOT the waitress type.
Teresa, good, but for whom? :)
Jessica, wait for it...
Ed, you have a knack for guessing right.
I can't wait for her to kick ass! She is so cool, it is going to be monumental!
Hi Ian - certainly Shayla can remain expressionless .. something we could all master - I await your next instalment .. cheers Hilary
Oh man, they are just digging in deeper with every word. Can't wait for her reaction!
Kim, ass-kicking on its way next week :)
Hilary, Shayla is a master of disguise and that naturally includes presenting to the world exactly what she wants to show.
Christina, they have dug a deep hole for themselves, that's for sure.
Oh dear, this is going to get very bad for the bullies, I have a feeling! But wonderful buildup going on, loved the excerpt.
I hope getting called names makes her angry.
Oh nice. You had me at "wall of muscle." How far along are you in this story?
Veronica, glad it's working for you.
Sheila, I suspect she's way past angry by now.
Cara, LOL, I might have guessed :) I've now got it about half drafted.
ooo,yeah, that last comment is not going to go over well...you've mastered maintaining tension. Every week I look forward to finding out what Shayla's doing!
This is going to turn ugly quite suddenly I'm thinking.
They are asking for trouble.
Marcia, Shayla's all about tension. Glad to hear that's coming over.
Elizabeth, you're quite right :)
Linda, now what would make you say that?
It's weird that he'd even try to dress up those threats with a smile. I guess they're willing to let her go without too much violence if she caves.
I sense a bad thing is about to happen to this guy.
Little does he know... Sounds like that guy might be in for a beat down.
Caitlin, I think that's the pattern with bullying out in the open, there's (so far) nothing attributable in his behavior.
Jean, yep!
Crystal, I think you've met Shayla before haven't you :)
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