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Continuing a scene from The Long Dark in Mikey’s point of view. Mikey is trying to make sense of the adults’ conversation over dinner after the loss of a crawler and one of its crew. They are discussing the difficulty getting replacements.
“What they don’t tell you,” Nick continued bleakly, “is the cost of shipping new units out here.”
Anna stared at him. “Then why not simply ship the parts we need to keep things running? I know nothing about costs, but even I can see that a few crates of spares is smaller and lighter than a whole car or yoop.”
Nick grinned. Mikel had trouble working out expressions, their range and subtlety confused him, but some screamed loud and clear out of the background clutter. Nick’s grin held no amusement, it was pure animal ferocity. Mikel winced. Neither Anna nor Georgina seemed to have noticed the feral threat Nick suddenly seemed to pose.
So what's got Nick mad? More next week.
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I really enjoy seeing this scene from Mikel's pov. Definitely gives an interesting perspective!
He's extremely perceptive!
Hi Ian - you're bringing more overtone into each excerpt - I didn't expect this sort of scene. Interesting ... but Mikel will search beneath to find out what's going on ... great story telling. Stay safe - Hilary
Very curious!
Jessica, Mikey is a very useful character for that purpose.
Ed, in some instances, but struggles in many others.
Hilary, Alex, thanks.
He's certainly a very close observor of people and the underlying emotions. Enjoyed the excerpt!
Mikel does a really good job of navigating emotions based on expressions. :-)
Veronica, Teresa, this insight is unusual for Mikey, he normally struggles with such things except in a few rare instances.
Perhaps Nick is already devising a plan?
Love the Mikel's interpretation of Nick as feral. That's very telling. Fun snippet. And I love your blog tagline "Life is not a spectator sport."
He's very perceptive..
Jeff, it turns out that Nick is already deeply involved in a plan!
Shari, I kinda like that line too :)
Elaine, in this instance, yes.
Very interesting that Mikel perceives him as "feral." I don't think this bodes well for anyone.
Wow, he is observant it would seem.
I wonder why he believed Mikel is feral. I'm curious to know more.
Seems like Nick is about to explode. Nice job making me wonder why. :)
Sorry, it's been a while since I've wandered over here. I like your new header art!
Oh, very interesting. Love the description of the grin.
So what's got Nick mad I wonder? Great snippet Ian.
I haven't been following your story...obviously, but you've made me very curious about what's going on. Great job. I'll be back.
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