tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post4712226166455233688..comments2024-03-16T07:55:54.153-07:00Comments on Views From the Bald Patch: Weekend Writing Warriors September 21Botanisthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-57606821319552456682014-09-23T11:54:47.155-07:002014-09-23T11:54:47.155-07:00For such a short snippet, it sure packs some descr...For such a short snippet, it sure packs some descriptive punch. :-)Misha Gerrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06364173848456424521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-14791373030925438452014-09-22T18:53:30.382-07:002014-09-22T18:53:30.382-07:00Nice little snippet. I can 'see' the scene...Nice little snippet. I can 'see' the scene.Lynda R Young as Elle Cardyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09975442291393246148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-46564048827689049742014-09-22T03:54:06.051-07:002014-09-22T03:54:06.051-07:00"Shayla closed her eyes and concentrated on t..."Shayla closed her eyes and concentrated on the sounds around her. The growl filled the air."<br />I liked those two lines. Builds tension.<br />Kudos!FCEtierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14199098303138353894noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-15563911255245948492014-09-22T02:02:29.237-07:002014-09-22T02:02:29.237-07:00I really love the ominous feel of this. It's s...I really love the ominous feel of this. It's so hard NOT to look at something when you really want to! Great 8!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-21709510547394697232014-09-21T17:13:29.326-07:002014-09-21T17:13:29.326-07:00Tina, thanks, that's what I was hoping.
Chell...Tina, thanks, that's what I was hoping.<br /><br />Chelle, you are pretty close, they just don't know specifically that it's <i>her</i> they're looking for :)<br /><br />Sue Ann, you've got to use all your senses in this undercover game.Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-6161313761961384352014-09-21T16:13:51.373-07:002014-09-21T16:13:51.373-07:00Good use of those senses that can be used without ...Good use of those senses that can be used without alerting the enemy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-45469700357462610992014-09-21T15:21:11.429-07:002014-09-21T15:21:11.429-07:00Your use of sound literally outs the reader's ...Your use of sound literally outs the reader's nerves on edge, great job. Wondering about the item in the air - could someone be looking for her? Great 8. Chelle Corderohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-22296016747377672092014-09-21T14:52:25.328-07:002014-09-21T14:52:25.328-07:00Great tension. I love how closely she listens. You...Great tension. I love how closely she listens. You're right there with her, hoping the craft will pass them by. Well done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-45386473133612168892014-09-21T14:36:57.470-07:002014-09-21T14:36:57.470-07:00Teresa, I'm still chuckling over Millie's ...Teresa, I'm still chuckling over Millie's comment :D<br /><br />Veronica, yep, nothing to see here... *whistles innocently*<br /><br />Neva, Cara, not sure if the disjointed nature of the weekly snippets is throwing people off, the growl is coming from the vehicle too...<br /><br />Caitlin, it's hard, but these people are professionals...we hope :)Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-54699582123209454632014-09-21T14:30:48.289-07:002014-09-21T14:30:48.289-07:00The hardest advice to take when you're doing s...The hardest advice to take when you're doing something illegal--just act natural.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-80903768452967555242014-09-21T14:29:25.947-07:002014-09-21T14:29:25.947-07:00Interesting--she's caught between something th...Interesting--she's caught between something that growls and a vehicle of some sort. Why do I feel like both are bad news?Cara Bristolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13787980548582603649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-15754833080627896662014-09-21T13:12:25.928-07:002014-09-21T13:12:25.928-07:00Interesting, I'm wondering what is out there g...Interesting, I'm wondering what is out there growling. Yikes. Great eight.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09436256293259964125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-2161933145915990532014-09-21T12:45:26.110-07:002014-09-21T12:45:26.110-07:00Why am I guessing the newcomer may very change cou...Why am I guessing the newcomer may very change course and things will get a bit intense? Your snippet really creates the mood - so hard NOT to look at something! Can't wait for more, great excerpt.Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-42434418772794464872014-09-21T10:30:58.204-07:002014-09-21T10:30:58.204-07:00Great use of the senses to pull in the readers! A...Great use of the senses to pull in the readers! And, I'm with Millie. lol. That gal is such a hoot! :-) <br /><br />Another good 8, Ian!Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-20107450047101200742014-09-21T10:11:30.342-07:002014-09-21T10:11:30.342-07:00Elaine, you're supposed to feel nervous :)
Jo...Elaine, you're supposed to feel nervous :)<br /><br />Joyce, I like to delve into the other senses from time to time. It does make a change.<br /><br />Frank, we'll have to see...<br /><br />Millie, love the way you're thinking :) <br /><br />Charmaine, Shayla doesn't need to search for trouble, it seems to find her!Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-40108743415380283052014-09-21T08:49:59.386-07:002014-09-21T08:49:59.386-07:00Tense situation or is just me searching for troubl...Tense situation or is just me searching for trouble. Super eight.Charmaine Gordonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15236373312231763983noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-62964881780888472432014-09-21T08:28:09.526-07:002014-09-21T08:28:09.526-07:00Ah, an airship...you've made me nervous for he...Ah, an airship...you've made me nervous for her, and I wish she was Jedi, "These are not the terrorists you're looking for" : )Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-830958341334891222014-09-21T07:20:45.362-07:002014-09-21T07:20:45.362-07:00I liked the description of the noise from the mach...I liked the description of the noise from the machinery. I think something rough is going to happen soon. Good 8!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-78209478006161580582014-09-20T20:46:49.063-07:002014-09-20T20:46:49.063-07:00Many passages rely on sight to describe the scenes...Many passages rely on sight to describe the scenes around them. I love the way you used sound to paint a refreshing snippet.<br /><br />http://joycelansky.blogspot.comCatch My Wordshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06338761214938263819noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-86889323300538040752014-09-20T18:46:20.071-07:002014-09-20T18:46:20.071-07:00You're making me nervous. I think something...You're making me nervous. I think something's wrong.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.com