tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post1917365011505600370..comments2024-03-16T07:55:54.153-07:00Comments on Views From the Bald Patch: Weekend Writing WarriorsBotanisthttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-45482781646856217012014-05-14T07:41:45.953-07:002014-05-14T07:41:45.953-07:00I like the starburst. Beautiful imagery. I haven&#...I like the starburst. Beautiful imagery. I haven't stopped in for a while, but I had to see if you're still kicking, and apparently you are. Have a wedge of virtual cheese, eh? Crystal Collierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03912469552483168148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-51988053458983714322014-05-13T17:22:37.100-07:002014-05-13T17:22:37.100-07:00Marcia, you may be right. No matter how many times...Marcia, you may be right. No matter how many times I've gone over it, or other eyes have been cast critically, there's always little nits to pick :)<br /><br />Valerie, thanks. Soon you will be able to read the whole thing for yourself.<br /><br />Kelworth, you got the general idea :)Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-16069935072769322002014-05-13T04:42:00.206-07:002014-05-13T04:42:00.206-07:00"Essence of Unity, this is going to be rough...."Essence of Unity, this is going to be rough."<br /><br />Somehow I have the sense that in your world, those words are profaning the sacred.<br /><br />Thanks for sharing, great to see you againAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-55519773875225489972014-05-12T20:13:57.512-07:002014-05-12T20:13:57.512-07:00I enjoy your writing very much!
Hugs!
ValerieI enjoy your writing very much!<br /><br />Hugs!<br /><br />ValerieValeriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15463173488099670688noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-17334911266920101162014-05-12T19:05:50.221-07:002014-05-12T19:05:50.221-07:00Awesome bit, Ian. Love your ability to add just en...Awesome bit, Ian. Love your ability to add just enough detail. One tiny suggestion? Here: "Chalwen paused near the top of the aisle," I don't think you need that comma after "aisle". Nitpicky, but I can't help it :D It's still a wonderful excerpt. Marciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07092928480361131154noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-76463655355716093512014-05-12T18:01:19.751-07:002014-05-12T18:01:19.751-07:00Elaine, Millie, glad you were able to picture the ...Elaine, Millie, glad you were able to picture the scene.<br /><br />Elizabeth, this is from a full-length MS getting ready for publication. These are just short snippets from the novel.Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-64930695391603921502014-05-12T11:17:16.875-07:002014-05-12T11:17:16.875-07:00Interesting! Is this from an ongoing MS you are wr...Interesting! Is this from an ongoing MS you are writing, or just flash fiction?Elizabeth Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06028099814857743134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-3057676395432902752014-05-12T07:05:43.985-07:002014-05-12T07:05:43.985-07:00I could totally picture this, excellent excerpt! ...I could totally picture this, excellent excerpt! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05551671528722336812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-86952710828679010722014-05-11T16:25:07.937-07:002014-05-11T16:25:07.937-07:00Wow, I could see the room in my mind. Well done.Wow, I could see the room in my mind. Well done.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-18333864425766330872014-05-11T15:39:35.252-07:002014-05-11T15:39:35.252-07:00Veronica, I envisage something like a cross betwee...Veronica, I envisage something like a cross between a Victorian lecture hall and NASA mission control :)<br /><br />Alexis, you spotted what I'm trying to do :)<br /><br />Caitlin, technology today has got a lot to answer for, hasn't it?Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-22696440468905851122014-05-11T12:53:49.864-07:002014-05-11T12:53:49.864-07:00I love how she's glaring at the technology lik...I love how she's glaring at the technology like it's to blame for her problems. Any computer user can relate to that!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-58145116707762820312014-05-11T12:30:37.315-07:002014-05-11T12:30:37.315-07:00Great scene setting. I love the way we learn about...Great scene setting. I love the way we learn about the character from other's reactions to her. Nicely done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-41402086112967493942014-05-11T12:22:55.820-07:002014-05-11T12:22:55.820-07:00I could certainly visualize the scene and that'...I could certainly visualize the scene and that's an extremely imposing room she's standing in. Can't wait to learn more - great 8!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-45844480288826190002014-05-11T11:01:46.635-07:002014-05-11T11:01:46.635-07:00Thanks, Teresa. Hope you have a great day!
Sue An...Thanks, Teresa. Hope you have a great day!<br /><br />Sue Ann, that is what I am hoping people will realize. Trying to tread the line between trusting the reader and explaining too much.Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-26238461463607043922014-05-11T10:56:25.923-07:002014-05-11T10:56:25.923-07:00Was the starburst on the schematic?Was the starburst on the schematic?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-84543905669131989672014-05-11T09:16:34.866-07:002014-05-11T09:16:34.866-07:00Excellent. I think I was quaking a bit being so cl...Excellent. I think I was quaking a bit being so close to her. Very visual, Ian. I like the technology. Nicely done! Have a great day. Oh, I didn't participate today, just out and about reading snippets. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-6982388489164055262014-05-11T08:58:18.646-07:002014-05-11T08:58:18.646-07:00Glad you enjoyed, Steven.
Cara, I try to keep tec...Glad you enjoyed, Steven.<br /><br />Cara, I try to keep technology as much straightforward and taken for granted as possible.Botanisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12098709722475364465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-76911649066354490532014-05-11T05:01:04.314-07:002014-05-11T05:01:04.314-07:00Good description of the technology. Easy to visual...Good description of the technology. Easy to visualize.Cara Bristolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13787980548582603649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1828517374142265050.post-1558427457039648702014-05-11T04:18:12.783-07:002014-05-11T04:18:12.783-07:00Great details and layout of the setting! Need to g...Great details and layout of the setting! Need to go read some of those older excerpts now...well done!Daezarkian13https://www.blogger.com/profile/08839083029518977312noreply@blogger.com